@TheOriginalTiki - Very creative, nuanced, but possibly at a risk! It's a lot to digest so I'm going to have to probably read it again to wrap my head around it to review it properly. The premise of the S.E.A. style characters is very compelling though and I'm a big fan of elaborate backstories, I just may be looking for more connections to the park, whereas this feels like its own entity, even if a very intriguing one.
Oh, I know for a fact it was a risk. The thing was I could have incorporated some RCT3 screenshots and root images if I really wanted to, but instead I decided to go in the complete opposite direction with it and make the first project in the modern history of the game that's all prose, all the time. I very much plan on expanding this into a full novel in the future. I think what I have now is a really solid framework for a story if I can pad out the details, put in some more characters, and grow the dynamics and relationships in a more full-fledged way.
I totally get that I'm the underdog of these three from the perspective of tying it to Mumbai. To be honest, I didn't even really try because I knew it was
@D Hindley's baby. My strategy for the final two rounds has always been to go against the curve, and I certainly think writing a literal novella qualifies as that.
I'm totally fine with third place. If I would have tried to go the artistic route there's no way I could have made anything even close to as good looking as my competitors so I think going the prose route was the right call at least as far as setting my project apart is concerned. By all means I'd like as much feedback as you can give me on the actual prose itself, not just the Imagineering parts of it.
(Keeping in mind this is VERY MUCH a first draft and pretty much a sampling of what a full Sathington Saltwater novel would be like...the different documents, eccentric characters crossing over in each other's stories etc.)
On a side note, reading this over and there's definitely a couple continuity things I forgot to iron out. I left what happened to Sally a complete mystery (she ran away from the pier the night Sathington showed her the tunnel of love, wanting to get away from both him and her husband and start a new life) A bit more minor but in the first document I had the tunnel of love opening up in mid March of 1965 for some reason instead of the Fourth of July which is a really important plot point in document six because Sathington had a thing for timing major attraction openings to the Fourth of July and the Fourth of July represents his devotion to and love of Americana even after diving knee-deep into the Willy Wonka persona after loosing his hand in the war.
