MJ's Posse

[Pongo]

Hey boys... ok that Ace character is really irritating me now... grrr...

Anyway- y'all having a good night?

I'm good.

Unlike Connor, I have no homework. Except for some economics crap that I have to study for an essay tomorrow. But I can do that in second period.

So I'm good

 

[Connor002]

Somebody tell me this makes sense:

“Revelation,” the profound poem by Robert Frost, uses seemingly simple literary devices to emphasize and allude to the human relationship with God and other human beings through a common bond of experience and faith in each other.

Please?

 

[Pongo]

Somebody tell me this makes sense:

“Revelation,” the profound poem by Robert Frost, uses seemingly simple literary devices to emphasize and allude to the human relationship with God and other human beings through a common bond of experience and faith in each other.

Please?

It's wordy.

Did you write it?

 

[Connor002]

It's wordy.

I know. I can't get it down to what I want.

Did you write it?

Oui.

 

[jesserin]

Somebody tell me this makes sense:

“Revelation,” the profound poem by Robert Frost, uses seemingly simple literary devices to emphasize and allude to the human relationship with God and other human beings through a common bond of experience and faith in each other.

Please?

umm... ok- i've never claimed to be the smart one around here... but what part of that doesn't make sense?

EDIT: Ok - you thought it made sense too -good - I share Luke's sentiments... it's a bit wordy- but describes the poem well.

 

[Connor002]

umm... ok- i've never claimed to be the smart one around here... but what part of that doesn't make sense?

I don't know. It just doesn't seem right to me...

 

[jesserin]

I don't know. It just doesn't seem right to me...

See above edit... (the only word I'd consider removing is "profound" - kind of over does it- what do you think?)

 

[Pongo]

I don't know. It just doesn't seem right to me...

I'll try to rephrase it for oyu... but it may come out with a totally different meaning.

Lets see...

Robert Frost's "Revelation" employs simple literary devices to reveal how common experiences and faith construct our relationships with God and other humans.

I think "construct" may be the wrong word to use in that particular spot.

I tried.

 

[jesserin]

Both of them sound great - i think it's all the "ands" that's making it seem wordy connor - is there a way to incorporate the phrases without using more than one "and" in a sentance?

 

[Pongo]

Both of them sound great - i think it's all the "ands" that's making it seem wordy connor - is there a way to incorporate the phrases without using more than one "and" in a sentance?

Ands and prepositional phrases. Both are bad.

 

[jesserin]

with, on, for, after, at, by, an, against, instead, of, near, between, with, off, for, under, down, below, to, over, up, according, to...

don't ask me how i remembered that stupid song... i learned that in 4th grade - (and probably added 4 or 5 of them that weren't in the orginal song - nor are they correct ) but i had to sing and share... LOL!

 

[jesserin]

alright boys - y'all have a great night - I'm gonna head out - i'm old and tired... and well... i'm going to bed now...

lol! Good Night!

 

[Pongo]

alright boys - y'all have a great night - I'm gonna head out - i'm old and tired... and well... i'm going to bed now...

lol! Good Night!

Good night Jess.

 

[jesserin]

Night!

P.S. Come sign my wdwmagic autograph book! (thread) Yay!


(ok so it's late and it sounded fun... we'll see how many people make fun of me for it )

 

[Pongo]

Night!

P.S. Come sign my wdwmagic autograph book! (thread) Yay!


(ok so it's late and it sounded fun... we'll see how many people make fun of me for it )

I did!

I think it's a good idea. But I didn't know what to say. You all know a lot about me already.

 

[Connor002]

See above edit... (the only word I'd consider removing is "profound" - kind of over does it- what do you think?)

I always seem to over-do things.

Lets see...

Robert Frost's "Revelation" employs simple literary devices to reveal how common experiences and faith construct our relationships with God and other humans.

I think "construct" may be the wrong word to use in that particular spot.

I tried

I don't know. I like it, but it doesn't seem "me."
Besides, I never take other's work.
Myabe I'll blend to two.

 

[Connor002]

Both of them sound great - i think it's all the "ands" that's making it seem wordy connor - is there a way to incorporate the phrases without using more than one "and" in a sentence?

One was easy to remove, the other not so much.

Ands and prepositional phrases. Both are bad.

"Ands" aren't good, but I was never taught that prepositional phrases were "bad."

 

[Connor002]

alright boys - y'all have a great night - I'm gonna head out - i'm old and tired... and well... i'm going to bed now...

lol! Good Night!

Good Night.
Old.
I'll talk to you tomorrow.
Old.
'Night!
Old.

:lookaroun

 

[Pongo]

I don't know. I like it, but it doesn't seem "me."
Besides, I never take other's work.
Myabe I'll blend to two.

Yeah, I wasn't expecting you to. Just thought it might inspire something else.

 

[Pongo]

but I was never taught that prepositional phrases were "bad."

Well, I guess they aren't necessarily "bad", but too many of them in one spot make the sentence hard to read and trip the reader up.