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MJ's Posse

Pongo

New Member
jesserin said:
Hey boys... ok that Ace character is really irritating me now... grrr...

Anyway- y'all having a good night?

I'm good.

Unlike Connor, I have no homework. Except for some economics crap that I have to study for an essay tomorrow. But I can do that in second period.

So I'm good :)
 

Connor002

Active Member
Somebody tell me this makes sense:

“Revelation,” the profound poem by Robert Frost, uses seemingly simple literary devices to emphasize and allude to the human relationship with God and other human beings through a common bond of experience and faith in each other.

Please?
 

Pongo

New Member
Connor002 said:
Somebody tell me this makes sense:

“Revelation,” the profound poem by Robert Frost, uses seemingly simple literary devices to emphasize and allude to the human relationship with God and other human beings through a common bond of experience and faith in each other.

Please?

It's wordy.

Did you write it?
 

jesserin

New Member
Connor002 said:
Somebody tell me this makes sense:

“Revelation,” the profound poem by Robert Frost, uses seemingly simple literary devices to emphasize and allude to the human relationship with God and other human beings through a common bond of experience and faith in each other.

Please?

umm... ok- i've never claimed to be the smart one around here... but what part of that doesn't make sense?

EDIT: Ok - you thought it made sense too -good - I share Luke's sentiments... it's a bit wordy- but describes the poem well.
 

Pongo

New Member
Connor002 said:
I don't know. It just doesn't seem right to me...

I'll try to rephrase it for oyu... but it may come out with a totally different meaning.

Lets see...

Robert Frost's "Revelation" employs simple literary devices to reveal how common experiences and faith construct our relationships with God and other humans.

I think "construct" may be the wrong word to use in that particular spot.

I tried.
 

jesserin

New Member
Both of them sound great - i think it's all the "ands" that's making it seem wordy connor - is there a way to incorporate the phrases without using more than one "and" in a sentance?
 

Pongo

New Member
jesserin said:
Both of them sound great - i think it's all the "ands" that's making it seem wordy connor - is there a way to incorporate the phrases without using more than one "and" in a sentance?

Ands and prepositional phrases. Both are bad.
 

jesserin

New Member
with, on, for, after, at, by, an, against, instead, of, near, between, with, off, for, under, down, below, to, over, up, according, to...

don't ask me how i remembered that stupid song... i learned that in 4th grade - (and probably added 4 or 5 of them that weren't in the orginal song - nor are they correct ;)) but i had to sing and share... LOL! :D
 

jesserin

New Member
Night!

P.S. Come sign my wdwmagic autograph book! (thread) Yay!


(ok so it's late and it sounded fun... we'll see how many people make fun of me for it ;))
 

Pongo

New Member
jesserin said:
Night!

P.S. Come sign my wdwmagic autograph book! (thread) Yay!


(ok so it's late and it sounded fun... we'll see how many people make fun of me for it ;))

I did!

I think it's a good idea. But I didn't know what to say. You all know a lot about me already.
 

Connor002

Active Member
jesserin said:
See above edit... (the only word I'd consider removing is "profound" - kind of over does it- what do you think?)

I always seem to over-do things.

Luke said:
Lets see...

Robert Frost's "Revelation" employs simple literary devices to reveal how common experiences and faith construct our relationships with God and other humans.

I think "construct" may be the wrong word to use in that particular spot.

I tried

I don't know. I like it, but it doesn't seem "me."
Besides, I never take other's work.
Myabe I'll blend to two.
 

Connor002

Active Member
jesserin said:
Both of them sound great - i think it's all the "ands" that's making it seem wordy connor - is there a way to incorporate the phrases without using more than one "and" in a sentence?

One was easy to remove, the other not so much.

Luke said:
Ands and prepositional phrases. Both are bad.

"Ands" aren't good, but I was never taught that prepositional phrases were "bad."
 

Connor002

Active Member
jesserin said:
alright boys - y'all have a great night - I'm gonna head out - i'm old and tired... and well... i'm going to bed now... :)

lol! Good Night!

Good Night.
Old.
I'll talk to you tomorrow.
Old.
'Night!
Old.

:lookaroun
 

Pongo

New Member
Connor002 said:
I don't know. I like it, but it doesn't seem "me."
Besides, I never take other's work.
Myabe I'll blend to two.

Yeah, I wasn't expecting you to. Just thought it might inspire something else.
 

Pongo

New Member
Connor002 said:
but I was never taught that prepositional phrases were "bad."

Well, I guess they aren't necessarily "bad", but too many of them in one spot make the sentence hard to read and trip the reader up.
 

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