Resume help

RyanS

RyanS

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Original Poster
Hey guys and girls. I'm going to be applying for a job soon and I was wondering if you could help me with my resume, this is what it looks like so far:
 
DisJosh

DisJosh

Well-Known Member
School is enough for me! lol

You may want to try and use the word "willing" a little less. Find a diferent word to replace it b/c it's a bit over used.
 
Tramp

Tramp

New Member
Originally posted by RyanS
Hey guys and girls. I'm going to be applying for a job soon and I was wondering if you could help me with my resume, this is what it looks like so far:

Ryan St.Paul
93 Surrey Lane
Manchester, New Hampshire 03103
(603) 647-4968

Job wanted: Part-time after school and weekend job
...Store Attendant ...Stockroom helper...

Reliable. Willing and able to show up on time.
Honest and trustworthy
Good attitude around others. Willing to help, patient with people, do my share, willing to learn.
____________________________________________________
Skills and Interests
...Good with money ...Good with computers ...Enjoys music, particularly Punk, Hardcore, and Alternative ...Has been playing drums for 6 years
____________________________________________________
Paid Work Experience
Job: Store Employee
Worked at Pro Flooring Supplies owned parents in Salem
... Stocked supplies. ...Handled checks and money.

References
Mr. Timothy St.Paul
Employer of summer of 2001
Pro Flooring Supplies, L.L.C.
Salem, NH
(603) 870-8088
____________________________________________________
EDUCATION
...Will graduate from Trinity High School in June 2004.


Anything to add, takeout, revise? Thanks for your help.
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..here are some things that hit me as i read thru it fast....

1. drop the 'job wanted' and insert 'objective'...

2. put your job experience before your skills and interest...

3. if you're not looking for a job in a music store, drop the punk rock interest cuz it may turn a redneck boss off...

4....all that reliability crap sounds nice but your willingness is NOT important....the job will require all of those things of you.

5. Replace 'good with computers' with 'computer literate'


....it's tough to write a decent resume without a whole lot of work experience so concentrate on things you are doing in school as your interests.....what courses you're taking and the extracurricular activites you are involved in......this will say volumes of what kind of a person you are.....

..hope some of this helps.......and check out websites dealing with 'resumes'.....I've hired alot of people in my life, and their resume is the very first impression i got of them...

good luck
 
Tink

Tink

New Member
Best advice: Listen to Tramp. :)

He's especially right about the punk thing (I would get rid of the music part entirely actually) - it sounds cool - it is cool - but your employer doesn't care about coolness.

I would also move the Education part up with your experience section (like Tramp says).

Good luck!
 
Lance

Lance

Active Member
Ryan, have you tried the airport, are they hiring. Working at an airport I have to think would look good on a resume down the road.
 
RyanS

RyanS

Member
Original Poster
i'm going for a job at a music store actually. i really like music, so that's where i want to be. thanks for all of the help.
 
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Sheri

New Member
I have nthng to say bout the resume...lol...but that scared me...I saw Manchester, which is where I live (but in Conn) and I saw 647, which is almost my number (643)...Wow...lol
 
DisJosh

DisJosh

Well-Known Member
Originally posted by RyanS
i'm going for a job at a music store actually. i really like music, so that's where i want to be. thanks for all of the help.
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Hmmmmm punk...

I noticed your AFI avitar b4...cool. U into any older punk or horror punk?

Hey does your new avatar by any chance mean Black Flag or are you just a pirate? lol :D
 

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