spacemt354
Chili's
Enjoyed reading all of the projects - here are my reviews filling in for @tcool123 temporarily.
For one, if pressed for time, I'd look at the overall project as a narrative, a three to five paragraph essay, rather than breaking it up into small, 1-2 sentence segments that to me bog down the attraction rather than immerse the reader. An example for this would be the queue, which felt a bit too long for SeaWorld, and seemed odd that you'd be traveling to Antarctica on an airplane, when you're already in Antarctica? I was a bit confused by that. Secondly, the time spent on the various segments of the queue, could have been spent detailing the backstory. Maybe there is a specific species Dr. Myers specializes in? Perhaps one that is going extinct that you need to save, or something like that. The premise (meeting a central science character for the attraction) is a strong one, but if more focus was put on a more specific purpose, then it makes designing the attraction, less of a 'room to room' description -- and more of a coherent narrative because you're on a mission rather than a freelance trip.
But again - overall I think what you put out should be applauded for your efforts. You could have easily tossed in the towel for the week, but you didn't - and that says a lot about you as an armchair-imagineer!
I'm teasing -- though I do think if this is an exhibit you're exploring, or if you're a group on an expedition to see the lodged ship and its surrounding areas on a research adventure - then it makes sense.
Am wondering if this is a trackless attraction? Only asking because it seems like that was a requirement of the prompt - however I will assume the boats are trackless akin to Shanghai Pirates (so no harm done)
Overall, similar to Disneylover, I would assume you were a bit rushed for time this week (as it seems everyone was). I liked the bit of danger you get into at the end where your boats begin to go too far out of range - but that's where I feel the ride shouldn't end -- it should pick up! Similar to Dinosaur, Body Wars, or other guided research based attractions where 'something goes wrong' and the adventure begins. That might be something to think about when tackling these types of attractions (not as if that is the only way to write them) but it's a method that has been proven to work in theme parks, and one I think that could work for yours as well! Thanks for the project!
Ultimately, with presumably a tight time frame to complete the attraction, you delivered something that is very promising! Thanks for the project!
I'll start by wishing you the best of luck on your essay and hope you did well on your exams. School always comes first and it's appreciated you made the effort to get something in. Due to the burden of school work, this review will take that into account, but offer some feedback if you ever get stuck in a situation like this again where you have to get a project out quick.
For one, if pressed for time, I'd look at the overall project as a narrative, a three to five paragraph essay, rather than breaking it up into small, 1-2 sentence segments that to me bog down the attraction rather than immerse the reader. An example for this would be the queue, which felt a bit too long for SeaWorld, and seemed odd that you'd be traveling to Antarctica on an airplane, when you're already in Antarctica? I was a bit confused by that. Secondly, the time spent on the various segments of the queue, could have been spent detailing the backstory. Maybe there is a specific species Dr. Myers specializes in? Perhaps one that is going extinct that you need to save, or something like that. The premise (meeting a central science character for the attraction) is a strong one, but if more focus was put on a more specific purpose, then it makes designing the attraction, less of a 'room to room' description -- and more of a coherent narrative because you're on a mission rather than a freelance trip.
But again - overall I think what you put out should be applauded for your efforts. You could have easily tossed in the towel for the week, but you didn't - and that says a lot about you as an armchair-imagineer!
I really like the ship crashed in the ice facade - makes the whole experience quite unique and original, something that gives a wow factor if done properly. However, I must say for a boat lodged in ice...everyone seems very calm and the captain seems to have no concerns about not being able to return to shoreAntarctica: The Animal Trek
Back Story:
You have an opportunity to go on a photographic adventure of Antarctica. A large boat will take you close to the mainland but then your family gets in smaller boats to get up close and personal with the animals.
Facade:
The facade is the outside of the large boat “lodged” in the ice of the surrounding area. You enter through one of the lower parts of the boat that then turns into a queue.
Queue:
The queue leads you through different areas of the boat including the cafeteria, boiler room, lounge, etc before ending in the Captains quarters where you get your debriefing before heading out on your own.
Pre-show:
Here you meet the captain of the ship. He informs you that each of your boats will be able to go into areas this large boat wouldn't be able to go into. He explains that all boats will be controlled by him but the further away the small boat gets, the harder it is to control and to not worry as it would only be brief moments with no control. With that, he sends the guests on the way giving them a friendly reminder to not take flash photography as it could scare the animals.
Load:
You exit the large ship on what appears to be a make-shift dock for the loading of the small boats. After guests load in, the boats are on their way through the ride.
Ride:
It starts off with the boats passing smaller icebergs where you can see animatronic versions of some of the smaller animals like albatrosses and some leopard seals. Here you get a little to close to an elephant seal for his liking so he loudly barks you away where you spin as you flee away. After moving inland more you come across a pair of humpback whales on either side of your boat following you in. On a screen upahead you can see one of the whales creating in its full glory.
From here you go into a small cave in the ice to see a large family of emperor penguins (front half are animatronics, rest are either static or screens) all huddled together on the rocks/ ice. To your left you can see the babies waddling around slowly with their parents and to your right you can see large screens portraying the penguins diving off of the ice to grab fish. This is when the captain pages us to say we are getting too far out of range and he's bringing us back in. At this point it's all ready too late as the boat starts to spin further into the cave. Upon going further into the cave we run into a small group of Gentoo penguins all alone with what appears to be some babies and their mothers. It's very still and quiet in this area as we are watching the babies be fed. The captain then calls us again to let us know he got control again and we are heading back to the big ship to unload.
Exit:
After exiting, you can go through a small gift shop back to the park, or you can go see some live penguins in a large, indoor exhibit. If they don't want to go though the exhibit, the guests will exit through the gift shop where you can find plushes, figurines, and shirts of different Antarctican animals.
I'm teasing -- though I do think if this is an exhibit you're exploring, or if you're a group on an expedition to see the lodged ship and its surrounding areas on a research adventure - then it makes sense.Am wondering if this is a trackless attraction? Only asking because it seems like that was a requirement of the prompt - however I will assume the boats are trackless akin to Shanghai Pirates (so no harm done)
Overall, similar to Disneylover, I would assume you were a bit rushed for time this week (as it seems everyone was). I liked the bit of danger you get into at the end where your boats begin to go too far out of range - but that's where I feel the ride shouldn't end -- it should pick up! Similar to Dinosaur, Body Wars, or other guided research based attractions where 'something goes wrong' and the adventure begins. That might be something to think about when tackling these types of attractions (not as if that is the only way to write them) but it's a method that has been proven to work in theme parks, and one I think that could work for yours as well! Thanks for the project!
While pithy, this project delivers in terms of a plot based narrative that I at least was looking for out of these projects. The 'mission' so to speak of the attraction, is clear from the get go, and you did a good job articulating through your descriptions, but also through the art, the direction of the attraction. A slight note on the concept art would be that while I can make out what the different areas are by reading the description, some labels on the art itself could make the distinctive areas more readily apparent.
Ultimately, with presumably a tight time frame to complete the attraction, you delivered something that is very promising! Thanks for the project!
