Need criticism/help

[ABigBrassBand]

SO I had this idea of doing a Disney Parks news show on YouTube, where I would update people with news on the parks, including hours for each park and information I compile from other sites around the internet.

This morning when I spent 10 minutes to film it, it seemed fine. After I was halfway through editing I then realized how much I didn't like the product, but decided to finish and upload anyways to get your guys opinions. At this point I'm just going to take down the video and cancel the channel, but I wanted to get your guys opinions on if I should continue or not.

The video can be found here.

 

[XxMickeyMousexX]

ok well i have a degree in broadcasting, and host and have hosted many events on radio and some tv work as well, including weekend anchoring for local news. I will give you some feedback, both good and not good. dont take it personal, you asked for it :ROFLOL:

-be more confident. I right away could tell you were nervous/unconfident in yourself. you shouldnt be, you know your stuff...thats obvious....but your body language told the audience "iam not confident" so the audience wont be confident in what your saying, true or not.

-make better eye contact with the camera. your eyes were wandering big time. stay a little more still (dont be a robot mind you) but be a little less herky jerky. I do like when people "tell stories" with hand motions etc. i speak with my hands big time!

-LOUDER. check 123. either get a usb desk mic (at walmart for a decent price) or get a headset. all i know is, as a potential fan...if im gunna watch your show....I WANNA HEAR IT!

you obviously have a "want" to do this sorta thing. thats awesome. so let me tell you what my improv coach told/tells me about being a little nervous about going on stage.

"if your gunna do it. mine as well go all out. or not do it at all. be your best. be outgoing, be funny, be loud, be heard. and put on a good show. if so...people will watch and come back"

I know you want to do this. you wouldnt post it on a public forum if you werent excited about it, i liked it. but hopefully you can take some of what i said and make it better for you and us. so we can all enjoy it.

another tip is to study yourself. ive done some stand up comedy, and the biggest critic i have is ME. i watch my routine and find i couldve came across funnier if i worded "this" different or said "that" with a different tone, if you want to take it serious, then become a student of the game....watch other people who do these kind've things....take a little bit from each person that fits your personality and roll with it!

Good luck! and if you need/want any other tips or advice dont hesitate to shoot me a PM !

-chris

 

[roma1625]

Please take this as constructive criticism. Your content is good, but you need to work on your delivery.

1. You framed the video badly. You chopped off the top of your head.

2. You moved around too much. Too fidgety.

3. You sound like you're trying to do this in such a way as to not disturb anybody else in your house. In other words, you're semi-whispering. Maybe you need to do this when nobody else is home.

4. I would consider writing a script when you do the first few, until you get comfortable ad-libbing. You're fumbling around with words, which is distracting.

Again, take the criticism as constructive. I know I would never have the nerve to do something like this, so kudos for trying and I'm sure you'll get more comfortable as time goes along.

 

[ABigBrassBand]

ok well i have a degree in broadcasting, and host and have hosted many events on radio and some tv work as well, including weekend anchoring for local news. I will give you some feedback, both good and not good. dont take it personal, you asked for it :ROFLOL:

-be more confident. I right away could tell you were nervous/unconfident in yourself. you shouldnt be, you know your stuff...thats obvious....but your body language told the audience "iam not confident" so the audience wont be confident in what your saying, true or not.

-make better eye contact with the camera. your eyes were wandering big time. stay a little more still (dont be a robot mind you) but be a little less herky jerky. I do like when people "tell stories" with hand motions etc. i speak with my hands big time!

-LOUDER. check 123. either get a usb desk mic (at walmart for a decent price) or get a headset. all i know is, as a potential fan...if im gunna watch your show....I WANNA HEAR IT!

you obviously have a "want" to do this sorta thing. thats awesome. so let me tell you what my improv coach told/tells me about being a little nervous about going on stage.

"if your gunna do it. mine as well go all out. or not do it at all. be your best. be outgoing, be funny, be loud, be heard. and put on a good show. if so...people will watch and come back"

I know you want to do this. you wouldnt post it on a public forum if you werent excited about it, i liked it. but hopefully you can take some of what i said and make it better for you and us. so we can all enjoy it.

another tip is to study yourself. ive done some stand up comedy, and the biggest critic i have is ME. i watch my routine and find i couldve came across funnier if i worded "this" different or said "that" with a different tone, if you want to take it serious, then become a student of the game....watch other people who do these kind've things....take a little bit from each person that fits your personality and roll with it!

Good luck! and if you need/want any other tips or advice dont hesitate to shoot me a PM !

-chris

Please take this as constructive criticism. Your content is good, but you need to work on your delivery.

1. You framed the video badly. You chopped off the top of your head.

2. You moved around too much. Too fidgety.

3. You sound like you're trying to do this in such a way as to not disturb anybody else in your house. In other words, you're semi-whispering. Maybe you need to do this when nobody else is home.

4. I would consider writing a script when you do the first few, until you get comfortable ad-libbing. You're fumbling around with words, which is distracting.

Again, take the criticism as constructive. I know I would never have the nerve to do something like this, so kudos for trying and I'm sure you'll get more comfortable as time goes along.

Thank you for the criticism. I don't know if I'll be doing this in the future due to confidence and not having time, but it was well worth the shot to know on what I can improve on. Cheers :wave: