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One Little Spark...
@TheOriginalTiki
Submission Post here
- Nice quotes.
- I liked the intro...until you switched voice and made it of a contemporary story of what "used" to be at IoA, and turned it into a story that it's a "real" presentation. I think you could have broken these two sections up and it would have helped with flow. I liked both sections, but the transition was...rough.
- And then you transition right back out of the "corporate presentation" section (with Masrani quotes and all) and back into a descriptive one. I think, the whole Masroni part, would have begged for one of your "character videos" where you "became" Masrani, and that filled the same space in your presentation. I think the flow would have worked better. I get what you were trying to do, and I applaud it, but I don't think it worked in the final presentation.
- Map...map...map...map...did I mention a map? That would have been nice. I have no idea where this old attraction was...and saying it isn't enough.
- And then you transition styles again with "Ladies and gentlemen, the good folks at the Masrani Corporation invite you to take a peak behind the walls of Jurassic World's latest and greatest attraction... "
- I really like the idea of having TWO walkthroughs that are unique. This is such a great idea to have! It offers "re-rideability", if you will, and also makes it a more unique attraction. I can't wait to see where you go with this concept!
- "A plague on the statue." Sorry, I laughed at that typo. No points taken off for it, but...yeah, the meanings are so divergent.
- I-Rex. Ok, not sure what it stands for, but it sounds nice. I wish you had defined WHY it was called the "I-Rex". But, in any case, as a "rider" and "reader", I'm still intrigued.
- Ok, now I'm a bit lost. So, is this the "path A" vs "path B" version you mentioned? I can see images / animatronics / whatever of people rolling around in gerbil balls, or I can go see the I-Rex? You are starting to lose me...nice visuals, but feels more like you are trying to slide in a miniland C-ticket attraction as you describe it, not a scene in a walkthrough.
- Colors...STAHP! If there is no reason to do them, don't do them.
- I still feel like you are trying to create a mini-land, not a walkthrough.
- That being said, the "Raptor Training" sounds great, and I think works perfectly.
- An "Ariel" view...either a well intended pun, or a typo. In either case made me chuckle.
Summary @TheOriginalTiki
I'm a huge fan of Jurassic Park, and am disappointed about how much potential it has vs what is available in theme parks. I think with this you tried to address some of the issues which exist in the Jurassic Park section of IoA currently, but I think you missed the mark. You went for something that is large, scary and iconic. Here, I'll use music to describe my thoughts...one sec...
You went for this...
When, what I think is missing from IoA is this...
The wonder, the interaction, the chance to really FEEL like you are visiting...well...Jurassic Park. And, one that isn't always a disaster thrill experience, rather the experience is the THRILL. I think, had you done it slightly differently, it would have made an excellent compliment to the current and rumored attractions. But, you kept wanting (I could tell) to go back into designing an entire land experience, not a simple walkthrough C or D ticket.
Awesome idea, awesome placement (though, still needed a map), and my favorite of the week hands down, but I still feel like you missed the mark in terms of final concept and presentation.
Submission Post here
- Nice quotes.
- I liked the intro...until you switched voice and made it of a contemporary story of what "used" to be at IoA, and turned it into a story that it's a "real" presentation. I think you could have broken these two sections up and it would have helped with flow. I liked both sections, but the transition was...rough.
- And then you transition right back out of the "corporate presentation" section (with Masrani quotes and all) and back into a descriptive one. I think, the whole Masroni part, would have begged for one of your "character videos" where you "became" Masrani, and that filled the same space in your presentation. I think the flow would have worked better. I get what you were trying to do, and I applaud it, but I don't think it worked in the final presentation.
- Map...map...map...map...did I mention a map? That would have been nice. I have no idea where this old attraction was...and saying it isn't enough.
- And then you transition styles again with "Ladies and gentlemen, the good folks at the Masrani Corporation invite you to take a peak behind the walls of Jurassic World's latest and greatest attraction... "
- I really like the idea of having TWO walkthroughs that are unique. This is such a great idea to have! It offers "re-rideability", if you will, and also makes it a more unique attraction. I can't wait to see where you go with this concept!
- "A plague on the statue." Sorry, I laughed at that typo. No points taken off for it, but...yeah, the meanings are so divergent.
- I-Rex. Ok, not sure what it stands for, but it sounds nice. I wish you had defined WHY it was called the "I-Rex". But, in any case, as a "rider" and "reader", I'm still intrigued.
- Ok, now I'm a bit lost. So, is this the "path A" vs "path B" version you mentioned? I can see images / animatronics / whatever of people rolling around in gerbil balls, or I can go see the I-Rex? You are starting to lose me...nice visuals, but feels more like you are trying to slide in a miniland C-ticket attraction as you describe it, not a scene in a walkthrough.
- Colors...STAHP! If there is no reason to do them, don't do them.
- I still feel like you are trying to create a mini-land, not a walkthrough.
- That being said, the "Raptor Training" sounds great, and I think works perfectly.
- An "Ariel" view...either a well intended pun, or a typo. In either case made me chuckle.
Summary @TheOriginalTiki
I'm a huge fan of Jurassic Park, and am disappointed about how much potential it has vs what is available in theme parks. I think with this you tried to address some of the issues which exist in the Jurassic Park section of IoA currently, but I think you missed the mark. You went for something that is large, scary and iconic. Here, I'll use music to describe my thoughts...one sec...
You went for this...
When, what I think is missing from IoA is this...
The wonder, the interaction, the chance to really FEEL like you are visiting...well...Jurassic Park. And, one that isn't always a disaster thrill experience, rather the experience is the THRILL. I think, had you done it slightly differently, it would have made an excellent compliment to the current and rumored attractions. But, you kept wanting (I could tell) to go back into designing an entire land experience, not a simple walkthrough C or D ticket.
Awesome idea, awesome placement (though, still needed a map), and my favorite of the week hands down, but I still feel like you missed the mark in terms of final concept and presentation.
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